New website hope this one is better than my last
27 June 2006, 08:39 AM
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Firstly, a vast improvement.
Secondly, consider making the online store have the same look and feel of the rest of the site.
The "About Us" copy could be improved.
I'm pretty sure you do not need to supply a business address.
P.O. Boxes are a waste of time. Any member of the public can go into the Post Office and demand the fully expanded address. This was brought in to stop fraudulent trading whereby the fraudsters hid their address.
Secondly, consider making the online store have the same look and feel of the rest of the site.
The "About Us" copy could be improved.
I'm pretty sure you do not need to supply a business address.
P.O. Boxes are a waste of time. Any member of the public can go into the Post Office and demand the fully expanded address. This was brought in to stop fraudulent trading whereby the fraudsters hid their address.
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27 June 2006, 09:04 AM
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Originally Posted by wannascoobydoo
Na im just learning m8 i have a m8 that helped with this infact done most,Who i must thank
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27 June 2006, 09:27 AM
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To be honest,i wouldn't order anything off that website if i was looking at it for the first time-no business address,and a mobile telephone no,would instantly put me off-it says you are probably trading from a bedroom-i'm sorry but that's my personal opinion.
I strongly reccommend you to get a business address and a landline telephone no,it would instantly set your business off.
Good luck
I strongly reccommend you to get a business address and a landline telephone no,it would instantly set your business off.
Good luck
27 June 2006, 10:34 AM
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Its better, agreed, built using CSS which is good, no tables, still some wierdness though, why is he using a textarea? Why not let the text flow down the page instead of restricting the height. It wont look weird.
Im using a Mac and the scroll bars dont work and the text area is too wide and it sticks out the side of the page.
I would suggest you have moved on from a £60 site to a £250 site (if built properly).
The wording is still poor - two examples "There are 2 main types of crystal. There is K5. The quality of the K5 crystals is the poorer quality of the two." and "Please be carefully when buying crystals often the cheaper crystals are the K5 Quality"
Suggest you read it very carefully and correct spelling and grammer cos so far it does look a bit numptyesque
You really have entered the lions den here!
Fair play though for doing this in the open, at least you're getting free advice/critisism and advertsing.
Im using a Mac and the scroll bars dont work and the text area is too wide and it sticks out the side of the page.
I would suggest you have moved on from a £60 site to a £250 site (if built properly).
The wording is still poor - two examples "There are 2 main types of crystal. There is K5. The quality of the K5 crystals is the poorer quality of the two." and "Please be carefully when buying crystals often the cheaper crystals are the K5 Quality"
Suggest you read it very carefully and correct spelling and grammer cos so far it does look a bit numptyesque
You really have entered the lions den here!
Fair play though for doing this in the open, at least you're getting free advice/critisism and advertsing.
27 June 2006, 11:53 AM
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HUGE improvement.
Speeling & typos again, though. Ad how many of your products do you want to describe as "shaped to perfection" - most of them seem to be at the moment...
Also the "About us" doesn't say anything about you, it talks about crystals and lasers. The laser part is a bit disjointed too. Interesting but it doesn't read very well... If you could add pictures to that bit it would be even better
Overall, though, not bad at all
SB
Speeling & typos again, though. Ad how many of your products do you want to describe as "shaped to perfection" - most of them seem to be at the moment...
Also the "About us" doesn't say anything about you, it talks about crystals and lasers. The laser part is a bit disjointed too. Interesting but it doesn't read very well... If you could add pictures to that bit it would be even better
Overall, though, not bad at all
SB
27 June 2006, 04:32 PM
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Thanks again guys for the honest opinions and i am very happy with them, compared to the last time but lets face it it couldnt be any worse
Great advice again lads/lasses
Great advice again lads/lasses
27 June 2006, 07:23 PM
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just looking at your site, my wife had a keyring one with her initial 'A' in it. unfortunatly it broke, but if you can get hold of another one, ill buy one!
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Looks better than the other site, but its the grammer that gets me
Welcome to Crystal glass fantastic. All the products in my store I take great pride in, And I only buy the best quality available.
We guarantee our products. And use the best available Packaging. Our post is always 1st class recorded delivery This means if your product or products go missing we will replace your order in full.
Please feel free to take a look around at our products, Also dont forget to visit our Online shop.
Is it my/our store, my/our products, I will/we do ?
Welcome to Crystal glass fantastic. All the products in my store I take great pride in, And I only buy the best quality available.
We guarantee our products. And use the best available Packaging. Our post is always 1st class recorded delivery This means if your product or products go missing we will replace your order in full.
Please feel free to take a look around at our products, Also dont forget to visit our Online shop.
Is it my/our store, my/our products, I will/we do ?
03 July 2006, 10:35 PM
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The way the images are resized in the store isn't very good, at a quick glance it looks like OSCommerce i know there are mods for that to use GD which is alot better at creating thumbnails than html is
03 July 2006, 11:21 PM
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Originally Posted by amazinggrace
Looks better than the other site, but its the grammer that gets me
Welcome to Crystal glass fantastic. All the products in my store I take great pride in, And I only buy the best quality available.
We guarantee our products. And use the best available Packaging. Our post is always 1st class recorded delivery This means if your product or products go missing we will replace your order in full.
Please feel free to take a look around at our products, Also dont forget to visit our Online shop.
Is it my/our store, my/our products, I will/we do ?
Welcome to Crystal glass fantastic. All the products in my store I take great pride in, And I only buy the best quality available.
We guarantee our products. And use the best available Packaging. Our post is always 1st class recorded delivery This means if your product or products go missing we will replace your order in full.
Please feel free to take a look around at our products, Also dont forget to visit our Online shop.
Is it my/our store, my/our products, I will/we do ?
04 July 2006, 06:08 PM
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Legally you have to put an address on your website. Don't matter where so you could really put it in a really obscure place BUT people have to be able to access it. Only know this as I got in touch with trading standards after I was ripped off by an internet based company. I got all my money back and more but it was them that went on the site and found the address for me so be careful! Oh and site looks pretty good to me!!
15 July 2006, 03:48 AM
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Originally Posted by red_dog104
Legally you have to put an address on your website. Don't matter where so you could really put it in a really obscure place BUT people have to be able to access it. Only know this as I got in touch with trading standards after I was ripped off by an internet based company. I got all my money back and more but it was them that went on the site and found the address for me so be careful! Oh and site looks pretty good to me!!
I have also corrected the spelling and other errors if you can find any i have missed let me know please
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15 July 2006, 09:05 AM
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Hi,
Site looks very nice - well done.
You still have a particular grammatical error which appears a few times throughout the site:
After a comma, you don't need a capital letter as you're not starting a new sentence. If you do mean to start a new sentence, then finish the old one with a full stop instead.
Sorry, I don't mean to sound patronising. You did ask for this sort of feedback!
From the home page:
"Welcome to Crystal glass fantastic. All the products in my store I take great pride in, And I only buy the best quality available.
I guarantee my products, And use the best available Packaging. The post is always 1st class recorded delivery, This means if your product or products go missing I will replace your order in full.
Please feel free to take a look around at my products, Also dont forget to visit the Online shop for all the latest bargains and sales "
Try this instead:
"Welcome to Crystal Glass Fantastic.
I take great pride in all of the crystal pieces in my store and I only buy the best quality available.
I guarantee my products and use the best available packaging when shipping. The post is always 1st class recorded delivery. This means if your order goes missing I will replace it in full.
Please feel free to take a look around Crystal Glass Fantastic and don't forget to visit the online store for all the latest bargains and sales. "
I also took the liberty of rewording it to reduce the number of times the word "products" is used, as it can sound clumsy if repeated too much. This is only a suggestion.
I didn't change the "best available packaging" wording, but you might want to consider this as you've already used the "best available" term to describe your wares in the previous sentence.
Keep up the good work and best of luck with the business.
Rich
Site looks very nice - well done.
You still have a particular grammatical error which appears a few times throughout the site:
After a comma, you don't need a capital letter as you're not starting a new sentence. If you do mean to start a new sentence, then finish the old one with a full stop instead.
Sorry, I don't mean to sound patronising. You did ask for this sort of feedback!
From the home page:
"Welcome to Crystal glass fantastic. All the products in my store I take great pride in, And I only buy the best quality available.
I guarantee my products, And use the best available Packaging. The post is always 1st class recorded delivery, This means if your product or products go missing I will replace your order in full.
Please feel free to take a look around at my products, Also dont forget to visit the Online shop for all the latest bargains and sales "
Try this instead:
"Welcome to Crystal Glass Fantastic.
I take great pride in all of the crystal pieces in my store and I only buy the best quality available.
I guarantee my products and use the best available packaging when shipping. The post is always 1st class recorded delivery. This means if your order goes missing I will replace it in full.
Please feel free to take a look around Crystal Glass Fantastic and don't forget to visit the online store for all the latest bargains and sales. "
I also took the liberty of rewording it to reduce the number of times the word "products" is used, as it can sound clumsy if repeated too much. This is only a suggestion.
I didn't change the "best available packaging" wording, but you might want to consider this as you've already used the "best available" term to describe your wares in the previous sentence.
Keep up the good work and best of luck with the business.
Rich
Last edited by RichS; 15 July 2006 at 09:15 AM.
15 July 2006, 07:03 PM
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Originally Posted by RichS
Hi,
Site looks very nice - well done.
You still have a particular grammatical error which appears a few times throughout the site:
After a comma, you don't need a capital letter as you're not starting a new sentence. If you do mean to start a new sentence, then finish the old one with a full stop instead.
Sorry, I don't mean to sound patronising. You did ask for this sort of feedback!
From the home page:
"Welcome to Crystal glass fantastic. All the products in my store I take great pride in, And I only buy the best quality available.
I guarantee my products, And use the best available Packaging. The post is always 1st class recorded delivery, This means if your product or products go missing I will replace your order in full.
Please feel free to take a look around at my products, Also dont forget to visit the Online shop for all the latest bargains and sales "
Try this instead:
"Welcome to Crystal Glass Fantastic.
I take great pride in all of the crystal pieces in my store and I only buy the best quality available.
I guarantee my products and use the best available packaging when shipping. The post is always 1st class recorded delivery. This means if your order goes missing I will replace it in full.
Please feel free to take a look around Crystal Glass Fantastic and don't forget to visit the online store for all the latest bargains and sales. "
I also took the liberty of rewording it to reduce the number of times the word "products" is used, as it can sound clumsy if repeated too much. This is only a suggestion.
I didn't change the "best available packaging" wording, but you might want to consider this as you've already used the "best available" term to describe your wares in the previous sentence.
Keep up the good work and best of luck with the business.
Rich
Site looks very nice - well done.
You still have a particular grammatical error which appears a few times throughout the site:
After a comma, you don't need a capital letter as you're not starting a new sentence. If you do mean to start a new sentence, then finish the old one with a full stop instead.
Sorry, I don't mean to sound patronising. You did ask for this sort of feedback!
From the home page:
"Welcome to Crystal glass fantastic. All the products in my store I take great pride in, And I only buy the best quality available.
I guarantee my products, And use the best available Packaging. The post is always 1st class recorded delivery, This means if your product or products go missing I will replace your order in full.
Please feel free to take a look around at my products, Also dont forget to visit the Online shop for all the latest bargains and sales "
Try this instead:
"Welcome to Crystal Glass Fantastic.
I take great pride in all of the crystal pieces in my store and I only buy the best quality available.
I guarantee my products and use the best available packaging when shipping. The post is always 1st class recorded delivery. This means if your order goes missing I will replace it in full.
Please feel free to take a look around Crystal Glass Fantastic and don't forget to visit the online store for all the latest bargains and sales. "
I also took the liberty of rewording it to reduce the number of times the word "products" is used, as it can sound clumsy if repeated too much. This is only a suggestion.
I didn't change the "best available packaging" wording, but you might want to consider this as you've already used the "best available" term to describe your wares in the previous sentence.
Keep up the good work and best of luck with the business.
Rich
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