Uhm...cheers, PhilC..

OK the white colouring of "please call or email" is hard to distiguish against the light blue of the main page, but here are some other grammatical errors / spelling mistakes that I've found.

Smoothed Arches

*..with the corsa, or another car that... - or any other car that...

*corsa - Corsa is a proper noun.

*modding conisuer. - Connoisseur

*colour!!. - colour!! - no fullstop required


Custom Smoothing :

*Its basically - It's basically

*It can be anything from smoothing side strips into doors to smoothing ur fuel filler cap away and relocating it to removing a swage line from the car… just to be different… if u think it can be done… we can do it… contact us with ur ideas and get a quote today! - I'm guessing that there should be more than 1 sentence here? Also, replace "u" with "you" and "ur" with "your" - it shows more professionalism.

*if you think your car - If you....

* cover car… this is the - cover car, this is..

Delock / Handle

*carried out to any - carried out ON any...

*there was ever - there were ever. It's a bad sentence structure per se, but I'm not sure how finicky you'd like me to get...


Smooth Roof Rails

*the look is one - Capital letter to start of sentence

*the 1 mod - Replace 1 with "one" - it just looks better.

*almost every make of car - Fullstop required.

**colour!!. - colour!! - no fullstop required


Smoothed Scuttle

*over look these mods - overlook

*vauxhall corsa - Proper nouns

*look modified cars, - Fullstop, not comma

*Euro look usually relates to smoothing, this being another the next step in the road to being completely smoothed - Sentence doesn't make sense as it stands.

*this being another the next step - Which? "Another" or "the next step"?

*completely smoothed - Fullstop required.


Smoothed Side Strips

*there is 2 ways - There are two ways...

*means u have strips - Replace "u" with "you".

*these indents a good example - these indents. A good example..

*Take a look at the examples. - What examples? There are no pictures..

*colour!!. - colour!! - no fullstop required

Smoothed Tailgate

*number-plate recess’s - recesses

*This modification can greatly enhance the look of flip paints - Did you forget to copy the rest of the paragraph here? In any case, you need a fullstop at the end.

*Number plates showing on top left picture, but not on the full screen picture.



This is just the first sub-menu listing from the first menu. If you wish me to carry on, let me know.


[Edited by Mice_Elf - 12/1/2002 6:06:59 PM]

 

Cheers mate good lad

just adding these arent my mistakes, i directly copy and pasted the pdf's the bloke made

Si

[Edited by super_si - 12/1/2002 6:02:59 PM]

 

Just adding if you can read that number plate ill send a £5 lol

** tail gate ** 1

[Edited by super_si - 12/1/2002 6:21:58 PM]

 

Flip Paints

*We also spray flip paints and other colour changing paint. - Isn't that the point of the page? "Also" in addition to what? "Paint" should also be "paints"

*Anything from Rage extreme Illusion to a coloured chips lacquer. - Should this be tacked onto the end of the previous sentence? On its own, it doesn't make sense.

[Edited by Mice_Elf - 12/1/2002 6:42:41 PM]

 

Just "Test Email to check link"...

Offers

*the skirts, - skirts.

*clear old stcok for space!... - "stock" and punctuation again.

*your interested when E-mailing - your interest when E-mailing.

*the kit allone is not - kit alone

*Visible number plate on 4th photo - D5 ***


On another note, it may be an idea to do before and after photos of the cars. A possibility is to show the After picture, but on Mouseover change to Before, so that people can get a visual idea of what you did to the car.




[Edited by Mice_Elf - 12/1/2002 7:22:47 PM]

 

Here

Im doing this site, and if people would could you spot the mistakes

• Spelling errors
• bad links
• pics dont work
• Pics are wrong one
• Licence plate can be seen

and general hints or improvements

Thanks for the help

Edited for bullet points, also if you've any pics that i could use

Si

[Edited by super_si - 11/30/2002 7:00:37 PM]

 

no errors then ?

 

http://www.koncept-developments.com/konceptcars.htm

this page the 2nd row right pic not working

But the most obvious problem with the site is the quality of the vehicles shown.

THEY'RE ALL RUBBISH

 

fixed

 

Try putting your address in the contacts area, then people will know where you are......it helps.
Also, a location map?

Mel

 

better than my first effort, did it yesterday morning ( that said, I ams an electrician by trade!):

www.maj.clara.net

edit:

added the www. to the link

[Edited by mj - 11/30/2002 7:47:03 PM]

 

Koncept is spelt wrong

There's no space between Koncept and development (on the button)

Found these in Delock/handle,

1st paragraph

Again slightly more a slightly more Euro style mod that will compliment a smooth car.[/b]

Last paragraph, I think handle is missing?

You could Smooth the locks away and keep the

Fitment

1st paragraph

u have a kit that needs fitting

Last paragraph

we all have to start some where and this is wherethe fun begins.

Custom work




This is a combination of everything we do rolled into 1!… by this we mean fitting actual lexus clusters to calibra, fitting cossie arches to a corsa, putting saxo pumbers on a punto… agin its very custom and is probably the 1 subject that has more possabilities than anything… how mad you make your car is your choice… if you think it can be done… we’ll do it!… phone for a quote


Not a bad site, I like it! Some nice cars on there too

Best of luck!

Bob

 

Yeah were going to have a part decicated to the work shop so pics of equipment etc. Its glasgow Area.

The ovens still getting fitted at the moment and tools still arriving.

Thanks everyone.

If you look the red for Ka comes up alot, that was my mates spent over 20k , the worlds loudest ford ka 150Db was brillaint playing the Xbox @ cruise's


Si

updated as far as bobs

[Edited by super_si - 11/30/2002 8:10:31 PM]

 

just added

http://www.koncept-developments.com/Yourideas.htm

si

 

Just call up anyone of my threads or replies and you will find a spelling mistake.......thats the way it is.........

 

Mines crap! look at all mine lol

 

On the Nos part of the site

'Unfortunately we aren’t willing to market this product as a buy only item, fitting must be done by our selves due to hearing so many horror stories. Leave this to the experts. For a reliable set-up call or email for more information or a quote.
(Typical price 75bhp jets, system supplied and fitted £800)'

ourselves
setup

(sorry can't highlight them)

And on the About us section

'In July 2002 the rebirth of Koncept Developments took place, a partner was brought in, in the shape of Coachworks specialist Barry Fleming. The premises changed and allot of money was spent to buy the latest equipment, fit out a whole new unit and build 2 demo cars. The rewards are now clearly seen by all. Koncept Developments had gone from a garage hobby to being Scotland's fastest growing Coachworks Specialist.'

Allot isn't a word. Should be alot, although I would try and use a different phrase

'We are a company that has been built around cruisers and modding enthusiasts simply because we are cruisers, we know what your expectations are and we know how you think, and that's why we promise to meet those expectations to the full at all times.
Look out for our work in future magazine features'

I would punctuate this differently. Lose the first commas for a full stop and change the 'and that's why we' to 'that's why'

Without reading the whole site in depth I think you use too many commas. Try and spilt for individual sentances.

Hope this is helpful

Cheers

 

Ok thanks mate! ignroe the contact page, its having issues with the php im using, but ive got he your ideas part working.

Ill edit it tomorrow

Si

 

nice site -

NOS page
- pr'bably have states as States;
our selves - s/b one word
last para doesn't make sense

your ideas ... page; re-typed with corrections

If you have thought of something you’d like to see on your car, but you're not sure if it's possible, why not call or email us for a chat…
you never know, that idea you have could soon be reality!.

The variations are infinite as it's you that decides how far you want
to go. This can be anything from a small piece of detailing you
want on/off the car, to being the front end of an Audi welded to a mini.

Let your imagination run wild and see if you can come up with
something no one else has, perhaps it's changing the lights to that
of another car or perhaps giving your car gull-wing doors...!
anything YOU can think of
Rest assured though, if it can be done… we can do it!


I'll leave the rest to Mice_Elf .......

 

Done got contacts working.

added workshop + location now getting meaning full error messages sorted

Si

 

Shouldn't that be a lot? God I'm pedantic!

J

 

be pedantic and find site errors

debating on just sending it into word and spell checking

 

"Good lad"...?

Me? Lad?

Mice <---- female, although no-one seems to realise this...

 

And yes....I know that I've spelt "distinguish" incorrectly...

 

Im sorry.

Thanks ive just finished editing the 1st menu.

Carry on please. This is a great help to completing the site.

my MSN name is "Konis going to kill me" i lost those pictures

 

Glancing at the Bonnet page, I can see one number plate Y949 *** on 2nd row, left picture, but it's not there on the full screen picture.

*Bonnet modification is a great way to change the look of your car, or add to the look of the car depending on the cars current look. - a-bluh? Belabouring the point a little here. "Bonnet Modification - a great way to change the look of your car, or to enhance its current look."

*depending on the cars current look. - ...car's...

*customers needs - customer's needs

*its amazing the - it's amazing

*badyboy’d bonnets!… - Badyboy? ]

*badyboy’d bonnets!… - ..bonnets...! Or ..bonnets!

 

Okey doke...I'll continue for a bit.

 

cheers just doing bonnets now

 

Reet tharn....

Colour Coding

*Changing the horrible black plastic on the car is to match the colour of the paint-work is a great way to make your car look more like that sports model you regret not buying and it also gives your car a more customised/personal look. - "Changing the colour of the horrible black plastic on your car to match the paintwork is a great way to get the Sports Model look and gives the car a more customised image."

*Basically the areas with no paint (usually fading black plastic) you select, - "Basically, the areas that you select with no paint (usually....)"

*the cars paintwork - car's paintwork

*colour code styling parts you may have - colour code ANY styling...

*coloured coded rear lights - Colour-coded rear lights

*is amazing!… - Pick a punctuation....

 

Done